Yesterday i went to the pop concent and it was so great. I went with my Sister .She is big fans of TH, too We arrived at the place on time, but there was such a big crowd. So the concert started nearly an hour late! The band played their most famous songs and we sang along to all of them .Everyone was dancing at mosphere was amazing .after the concert, I was photographed with the band. It was an amazing performance. The music was lively and the band were really talented.mọi xem giúp em với có cần chỉnh sửa gì ko ạ
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Yesterday i-> I went to the-> a (do danh từ nhắc đến lần đầu tiên) pop concent-> concert (buổi hòa nhạc) and it was so great.I went with my Sister-> sister .She is big fans of TH, too-> I am a big fan of TH, and she is, too. (phần này ý bạn muốn nói là chị tôi cũng là người hâm mộ TH, để nói về sự đồng tình (giống nhau) ở khẳng định thì mình sửa thành là: Tôi là fan của TH và chị tôi cũng vậy).We arrived at the place on time-> early (chỗ này theo mình bạn sửa thành “early” thì sẽ rõ ý hơn: Chúng tôi đến địa điểm sớm nhưng đã rất đông rồi, kiểu vậy), but there was such a big crowd.So the concert started nearly an hour late! -> An hour later, the concert started. (mình thấy câu này bạn viết chưa phù hợp nên mình sửa lại thành: Một tiếng sau thì buổi hòa nhạc bắt đầu)The band played their most famous songs and we sang along to-> with (along with: cùng với) all of them.Everyone was dancing at mosphere was amazing-> and the atmosphere there was really amazing (bạn thiếu liên từ, mình thêm liên từ “and” để mạch lạc hơn nhé: và không khí ở đó thực sự tuyệt vời).After the concert, I was photographed with the band. It was an amazing performance. The music was lively and the band were really talented. (đoạn này mình thấy cũng ổn rồi nhé)